The Great American Teenager Model
by Turner Zischka
All of the teenagers must be hip and cool
with the latest clothing and newest phone
and a bright shiny car.
Obsessed over name brands
such as Apple, Abercrombie, and American Apparel.
If she is a girl then she must always wear tight fitting yoga pants
and a whole bucket of covergirl makeup.
If it is a he then they must always be disruptive when others try to learn in school
and must always be incredibly stupid and try to pull of stunts that endanger his well being.
They must all be signed on with Facebook, Twitter, tumblr, and Myspace.
and have their life be displayed freely all over, like they are unique.
They must do poorly in every class in high school
and asked why, they simply respond “I’m not that good.”
They will always take pictures of themselves and everything they do.
and take pictures with them puckering their lips as if they were a duck.
If they are a girl they most always have a hidden feeling
a feeling which at it’s base is nothing more than a false identity.
If they are a boy then they must be always show their superiority
and in that quest, show no heart and bully those who are weaker.
Even though they might think they are special.
The question is asked again and again.
But the answer we hold is merely just a lie.
TurnerZspage 
Hi Turner,
This poem is really great!
There is one little error in grammar when you say ” THE must do poorly in every class in high school” it should be they. But I couldn’t find anything else.
I think you could also maybe add a little more imagery. Its there and its great, but I think you could fine tune it a bit more.
You could add some more figurative language. I don’t think I see any in this poem. Maybe some similes would be good, and I also see some opportunities for personification.
You have very good specificity. Good Job.
Your ending was my favorite part of this poem. It really really made me think. Great Job!
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I very much enjoyed this poem. I believe it shows exactly how highschoolers behave. I also like that it looks like you actually know what you’re talking about. As for the things I think could’ve been better, the two phrases “If she is a girl” and “If it is a he” seem like they aren’t quite in sync. You also mentioned them taking pictures of themselves in two consecutive lines. Other than that, it was great.
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I like this Poam. When I read it, I get the feeling that you do not like this about how teenagers feel they have to live. You say this without directly saying it. I also like how you show the difference between boys and girls. You odd a good job of showing the stereo type which makes the whole issue of acting as you are expected to act as being silly. You should say “if it is a boy” to match the style set by the previous girl.
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